On White Sands

Carpe Diem Tanka Shrine #6, Takuboku’s “on the white sand”

white sands
still hot on my bare feet
as the sun sets
amidst broken sand dollars
tears flow for you

3 thoughts on “On White Sands”

Nicely done 🙂 Your tanka opens with a beautifully romantic scene – which makes the mood shift in the ending very poignant —

adaspoetryalcove says:

May 6, 2015 at 1:07 pm

Thanks for your kind comments.

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1. Jen says:
  
  May 6, 2015 at 1:55 pm
  
  Very welcome 🙂
  
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