Carpe Diem Weekend-Meditation #30 Revise That Haiku … Soen Nakagawa’s “mountain peak”
one note of the shakuhachi
resounds endlessly
piercing the winter clouds
disappearing
snow on mountain peak
unfurls a Rainbow
© Soen Nakagawa (1907-1984)
trill of the flute
winter clouds rent
one not resounds
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Reblogged this on Frank J. Tassone and commented:
#Haiku Happenings #2: Ada’s latest revised haiku for Carpe Diem!
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Thanks for the Reblog Frank.
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Wow Dolores you’ ve outdone yourself … these revisions are better than the original in my opinion.
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Thank you for your kind words, Kristjaan.
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